Narrative: Young Detective

The Young Detective

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It had been three days since it had gone missing. One minute he had held it in his hand, the next it had vanished. How could it just have disappeared? It had been right in front of his eyes!
He had been warned about what would happen if he lost it. His mission had been to guard the key with his life, ever since they visited him last summer.
Adam had always had a detective’s instinct. They had told him as much. He had been chosen because he had certain skills, and he would need them more than ever now.
Only one clue had seemingly been left, which was sat on the living room table.
Holding the magnifying glass up to his eye, Adam began to investigate…


Adam was full of fear.  He didn’t know what would happen to him if he didn’t find the key sooner.  He started to look in the lounge.  He looked under the sofa, under the coffee table, and  inside the chimney.  Wait, why would it be inside a chimney?.
He gave up.  Adam bursted out with tears.  He was so scared.  At this point he didn’t know what to do.  The last place Adam had been to was the Library.  Adam quickly put his shoes on and he ran to the library.  The Library closes at 12:00.  It’s 11:30 at the moment.

 Adam was surprised.  He saw his Dad sitting on the chair.  Adam stopped for a moment. But Adam had  no time to chat.  Adam quickly ran to the corner.  That was the last place Adam was seated.  He looked everywhere.  Adam just sat down on the chair. Sad and angry.
“How could I lose that key?.  It was right in front of me,  IT WAS IN FRONT OF MY EYES!” 
Adam sat there.  For at least two minutes.  But something was off.  He could feel someone staring at him.  The hairs from the back of his neck were tinkling.  He stood up. To his surprise, he saw his Dad.  Adam Screamed!.
“Dad what are you doing?!.”
His Dad laughed.
“Son, I know why you’re here.”
Adam didn’t have a good connection with his Dad.  They would always have bad moments with each other. 

“You..You know why I’m here?”
“Of course I do.  I’m your Dad.  I have my own ways to keep my eyes on you.”
“Then why am I here?.  What am I here for then?”.
He giggles.
“You’re looking for the key. Hahahaha. I wonder... where.. it.. is!”
“Dad give it to me!!”
Says Adam.
“Try and FIND ME!”
Adam’s Dad quickly runs away!.
Adam couldn’t keep up.  His Dad disappeared.  He was nowhere to be seen. 
“I gotta  get that key! Why does he always have to act childish!!”
Adam saw his Dad run into the bathroom.  He rapidly ran after him.  Adam was shocked.  His Dad disappeared.  AGAIN! 

“Wha….What?.  Does my Dad have superpowers?” 



TASK DESCRIPTION:  WALT: write a narrative. For this weeks assignment I had to right a narrative about a picture. "The Young Detective". Some students from my class helped me improve my writing. Mrs. Moala started off our writing. (Her writing is in blue. The writing in black is mine.) I hope to finish this writing soon.

Unorganized writing

Another way to be a good daughter is to talk nicely to your parents. By telling them how much you appreciate them, and answering back in a positive manner you are showing your parents how much they mean to you.  When your parents ask you to do something it is important that you listen and respond in a timely and respectful manner. For example, when mum asks you to put away the laundry, you should immediately respond by saying, “yes mum” as you stand up and put the laundry away without a scowl on your face.

Another way to show that you are a good daughter is by your actions.  By being helpful around the house you are showing your parents that you respect them. For example, when you keep your bed made and your room clean you are showing that you respect your living space. This also comes into play when you complete your chores without being asked. So, when you wake up in the morning or get home from school, immediately vacuum the house, put away the dishes and take out the rubbish. 

It is very important to always show kindness towards your parents. Although this can be difficult at times, it is important to show kindness to your parents because it shows that you respect them. For example, when you really want to go somewhere with your friends and your parents tell you that you have to stay home and look after your little siblings, it is important to remember that your parents have your best interests in mind.

Anyone has the ability to be a good daughter. By showing kindness, listening to your parents, and being helpful you are showing your parents that you love and respect them. What else can you do in your life to be a good daughter?

TASK DESCRIPTION: Instructions: Take a close look at the written portions of the explanation written by a former PES student below. 

1. copy and paste each section in the correct box on the explanation template above. 
2. Using the highlighter tool (above next to the text colour icon), highlight all of the connectives YELLOW .
3. You should have one empty box in the template. Taking time to decide what that empty box should be about, write the missing part of the explanation. 
4. In each Information Paragraph:
1. Highlight each statement BLUE
2. Highlight each explanation GREEN
3. Highlight each example PINK

(This is not my writing). I had to highlight all the sentences that had the SEE paragraphs in them. Statement, Explanation, and Example. I also had to highlight all the connectives. However, when, because, and If.

Estuary Health Check

Task Description: WALT: identifying and resolving issues arising from competing information in texts. I had to work with a person on this assignment.  My partner is Paige.  We had to write why we agree/disagree about keeping the cockles in their bay.

Homework: Family Hero

 



My Grandfather is a hero to me, because he tried his best to bring my Grandma, My Mother, and my Mother's Siblings to New Zealand. 

My Grandfather worked on a boat as a fisherman.  (there are different types of fisherman.  The one that works on land, and the one that works on a boat.)
He would travel miles away from home.  He lived in Samoa.  He would travel to kukuiula, Savaii, and around America!!  My Grandfather worked very hard to bring my Grandmother, and my mothers siblings to New Zealand.  My Mother is the eldest of them all.  So she came first to New Zealand. 

I look at my Grandfather as a hero.  He's taught me many things.